tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post2008481941969889082..comments2023-05-14T21:11:23.699-04:00Comments on CHEESEBURGER BROWN: Story Wallah: The Christmas Robots - Chapter 12Cheeseburger Brownhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01384136287767500794noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-26789729893435587362009-01-13T09:26:00.000-05:002009-01-13T09:26:00.000-05:00Sheik - In a way, you're right. For me, anyway, t...Sheik - In a way, you're right. For me, anyway, the love angle kind of did fail, now that I'm almost finished. <EM>Twilight</EM> definitely doesn't make me excited about reading the way a CBB story does, and it's a bit hard to get past all the "he was so beautiful" thoughts of the main character, but the vampire parts of the story are pretty good. The most moving part relates to the girl's relationship with her father.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08722639974320971726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-21093198745079545232009-01-12T06:56:00.000-05:002009-01-12T06:56:00.000-05:00On Cheeseburger's blog, not a creature was stirrin...On Cheeseburger's blog, not a creature was stirring, not even the tiniest post... Wuz happening?! I'm going bananas!!... *sinks into withdrawal*Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-67215687338025622742009-01-09T13:49:00.000-05:002009-01-09T13:49:00.000-05:00So Twilight was like your story in that it failed?...So <I>Twilight</I> was like your story in that it failed?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-17637178009993594262009-01-09T11:00:00.000-05:002009-01-09T11:00:00.000-05:00Big t, I'm reading Twilight right now and a guy up...Big t, I'm reading <EM>Twilight</EM> right now and a guy up at work threatened to revoke my man card.<BR/><BR/>My main interest was that I recently wrote a story that seemed to have similar elements (before I even knew <EM>Twilight</EM> existed), and after hearing a co-worker (guy) talk about it and seeing my wife get very into it, I had to see for myself. My original intent for my story had been to include a love angle, but I failed. Thought it might help to read someone who obviously did it right.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08722639974320971726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-50191705265789826402009-01-02T13:41:00.000-05:002009-01-02T13:41:00.000-05:00Oh No! It's too late my 12 year old niece lent me ...Oh No! It's too late my 12 year old niece lent me her Twilight Series, I am half way through the fourth book. Now I think I'm a vampire or a Vampire/Werewolf hybrid sent to unite the two Mythical Clans. CBB I need a new story so I can go back to thinking I am a R0b0t.Big thttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03728437300843445339noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-14449825161806669972009-01-02T00:31:00.000-05:002009-01-02T00:31:00.000-05:00Also, Big t, since you mentioned it, here's a very...Also, Big t, since you mentioned it, here's a very brief, somewhat amusing <A HREF="http://www.rabbitroom.com/?p=1241" REL="nofollow">review</A> of Twilight.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-85097437825234101132009-01-02T00:21:00.000-05:002009-01-02T00:21:00.000-05:00Happy New Year, Cheeseburger Brown! HNY to everyo...Happy New Year, Cheeseburger Brown! HNY to everyone else too; I hope you all had a great time partying last night. For our part, we got the kids put to bed and then enjoyed take-out and <I>Friends</I> reruns before falling asleep at 11PM.<BR/><BR/>CBB, regarding your question regarding my assertion regarding Chapter 10: I was under the impression that mercy, by its very nature, is something undeserved. Lexically speaking, I've always seen it placed in opposition to justice -- though perhaps the current pop culture influence is swaying the Webster folks, as it does all too often ( still, the <A HREF="http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/mercy" REL="nofollow">first few definitions</A> fall in fairly well ).<BR/><BR/>Does that help at all?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-50871331057721601602008-12-23T05:18:00.000-05:002008-12-23T05:18:00.000-05:00Almost forgot.. Merry Christmas everybody!Almost forgot.. Merry Christmas everybody!fooburgerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00598732577922981025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-38377880002659995312008-12-22T10:15:00.000-05:002008-12-22T10:15:00.000-05:00Nice finish. I'm glad to hear, also, that you are...Nice finish. I'm glad to hear, also, that you are considering a story about the Lifeloaf's world. I know the current (yet hiatus-ed) TSM and the Simon of Space universe are not separate, but the characters' adventures in space and the secret math in action tug at me more than all the (made-up) principles behind it.<BR/><BR/>Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to all (or whatever holiday you celebrate at this time of year).Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08722639974320971726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-19855652236262602382008-12-18T03:26:00.000-05:002008-12-18T03:26:00.000-05:00i read this reluctantly, because i didn't want...i read this reluctantly, because i didn't want it to end. and it doesn't, in a fashion: it -says- "the end," but it's not really. if it were a movie i'd roll my eyes because it's clearly setting itself up for a sequel, but here i try not to shout "no! it can't end here!" out loud.<BR/><BR/>merry christmas, robs & bobs! cheeseburger, do you think you'll ever sell an xmas story collection via lulu? also, i just realized "the christmas robots" and "pink santa" are both 12 chapters, which would make a lovely "12 days of christmas" ritual to read in future years...gl.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11890196589573443189noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-55626650866872439492008-12-18T03:10:00.000-05:002008-12-18T03:10:00.000-05:00Actually, one other thought. This was different f...Actually, one other thought. This was different from your previous x-mas stories in that the x-mas focus was less clear until the end. The Santas-gone-wild and x-mas-on-the-moon stories (can't rmemeber their names) were more x-mas themed throughout.<BR/><BR/>that's just the sense that I got...fooburgerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00598732577922981025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-76542125502915087662008-12-18T03:08:00.000-05:002008-12-18T03:08:00.000-05:00" and Ting while they muck with their watches, tal..." and Ting while they muck with their watches, talking to their girlfriends or placing bets on the games."<BR/><BR/>I understand this now, but it threw me for a loop at what they were doing with their watches was 'talking' and 'betting'. Maybe there's a better wording.<BR/><BR/>This was nice...fooburgerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00598732577922981025noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-47450429806996828902008-12-17T19:03:00.000-05:002008-12-17T19:03:00.000-05:00Thank again for all of your stories, guess I'll ha...Thank again for all of your stories, guess I'll have to get a copy of "Twilight" until you are ready. (I'm not sure if I'm joking) HX-Mas to all!Big thttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03728437300843445339noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-44420141143683115922008-12-17T16:49:00.000-05:002008-12-17T16:49:00.000-05:00Oy, thanks bobs.Sheik: you mentioned in your late ...Oy, thanks bobs.<BR/><BR/>Sheik: you mentioned in your late Chapter 10 comment an understanding of mercy in inverse relation to deserving (or I might have misunderstood). Would be good enough to amplify? I never really thought of it that way.<BR/><BR/>Wil: more, of a kind, will follow. As I've mentioned previously, I am now in the midst of a seriously crushing schedule this winter. In hard economic times one must always feel gratitude for being overworked, so I'm not complaining, but it is certainly proving to be a difficult spell. There will be some down time, writing-wise, sadly.<BR/><BR/>So, what happens next?<BR/><BR/>Unsure. I can tell you this: we're not immediately picking back up into TSM for now. I promise to finish it (and you know my promises are solid, if sometimes the deadlines drift), and we'll see it closed off the way it deserves, but not next. I need to refind my place, and restructure my ending.<BR/><BR/>Yesterday on the way home, though, I did think up a totally new novelette-length story I'm interesting in telling. It takes place at the star system the Lifeloafs fled, just before it was declared barbarian by the Panstellars. We'll see how that pans out. Need to think about it more, find some juicy hooks.<BR/><BR/>Now that our Christmas story is complete, don't forget to share it with friends and fam!<BR/><BR/>Love,<BR/>Cheeseburger BrownCheeseburger Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01384136287767500794noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-71614279817080542132008-12-17T15:20:00.000-05:002008-12-17T15:20:00.000-05:00...so I come back from the brink of flu-induced de......so I come back from the brink of flu-induced delirium, and there are two new chapters -- Yay!<BR/><BR/>Ah, that was nice. You'd think, though, that an adult Captain Ting would be a little "softer" toward rubbits (or "robets", as he would say 20 years from now), but I suppose a lot happened in the interim.<BR/><BR/>Chicken made me laugh as well... but I still always hear him as Chekhov from Star Trek (even though Reullians apparently have no connection whatsoever to current ethnic groups). I can't imagine the trouble an audiobook would have with this!<BR/><BR/>Way to go, CBB; have yourself a Merry Christmas. Thank you for sharing your gift.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-35206263468767648642008-12-17T15:02:00.000-05:002008-12-17T15:02:00.000-05:00Wonderful, as always. "Always leave them wanting ...Wonderful, as always. "Always leave them wanting more", eh?SaintPeterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02064605142705446251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-50558486976145149182008-12-17T13:19:00.000-05:002008-12-17T13:19:00.000-05:00Wonderful! Thank you for another great story! Merr...Wonderful! Thank you for another great story! Merry Hyper-Christmas, Cheeseburger Brown!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-45218165400319518832008-12-17T12:52:00.000-05:002008-12-17T12:52:00.000-05:00I like how this leaves me with the feel of an even...I like how this leaves me with the feel of an even greater adventure ahead, at least for Bethix. Chapters 11 and 12 combine to create the sense that this stopover was but a small incident in a much larger grand scheme of events.<BR/><BR/>I don't like stories that are all neatly tied up at the end. They seem too faerie-tale-ish. This one certainly doesn't disappoint in that regard.<BR/><BR/>Reading Ting's dialogue gets a little trying at times, but it's also rather endearing, and the South African(ish) accent comes across quite clearly. "Chicken" made me laugh.<BR/><BR/>Merry Christmas to you and yours, CBB. And more time to write serials in the new year!Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06946639624660520997noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-81718156080961582422008-12-17T11:59:00.000-05:002008-12-17T11:59:00.000-05:00Very nice overall -- thanks for the great story :)...Very nice overall -- thanks for the great story :)EMHMark3https://www.blogger.com/profile/08215789780507400127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-59973620066447488512008-12-17T11:37:00.000-05:002008-12-17T11:37:00.000-05:00And so ends another great Christmas tales. Can't b...And so ends another great Christmas tales. Can't believe it's the 3rd one. So that means I have been reading this here blog for that long! <BR/><BR/>Thanks for this continuing gift and Merry Christams, CBB! I really should treat you to lunch or something next I am downtown during a weekday.Orick of Torontohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07151258407218493474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-74556046961137523262008-12-17T10:40:00.000-05:002008-12-17T10:40:00.000-05:00More...Please!?!More...Please!?!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com