tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post7933814755885470102..comments2023-05-14T21:11:23.699-04:00Comments on CHEESEBURGER BROWN: Story Wallah: One Small Step for Santa - Part ThreeCheeseburger Brownhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01384136287767500794noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-19524615717797246592007-12-31T19:18:00.000-05:002007-12-31T19:18:00.000-05:00I finally read all of the parts, pretty good.I finally read all of the parts, pretty good.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-69679262809139635932007-12-25T15:12:00.000-05:002007-12-25T15:12:00.000-05:00Merry Christmas, Hemming Clan.I got my copy of Bik...Merry Christmas, Hemming Clan.<BR/><BR/>I got my copy of Bikes in the mail several days ago, and greatly appreciate the hand-penned note fully as much as the novellette. I can't wait to re-live Luc's adventure! Just pausing here Christmas afternoon while the wee boy's napping and the elder boy's out with relations to nab some "me" time for a moment or two. (And some coffee and Bailey's.)<BR/><BR/>Thanks again, CBB, just generally, for the gift of your stories and amazing talent in bringing them to us. Here's to the Secret Mathematic in the new year, and many adventures to come!Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06946639624660520997noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-86474623521353682732007-12-22T02:21:00.000-05:002007-12-22T02:21:00.000-05:00On the way to my folks' house for the Christmas ho...On the way to my folks' house for the Christmas holiday, our son got a set of 3-D glasses with his grilled cheese sandwich (to view a dinosaur mini-poster).<BR/><BR/>Of course, as soon as everybody went to bed, I had to crack open my laptop and come here to look at the illustration. Great job, CBB! The moon really is behind them, and that one reindeer's head sticks out nicely.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08722639974320971726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-14645480386558283422007-12-19T20:40:00.000-05:002007-12-19T20:40:00.000-05:00Yeah, I was kind of wondering about (a) George and...Yeah, I was kind of wondering about (a) George and Marcus' mis-identification, (b) why the jail was full of Santas,(c) why they all didn't try to get out, and (d) why Marcus spilled the entire secret of the brotherhood to a whole prison full of people. Sure, it can be argued that "tell the truth and no one will believe you", but sooner or later somebody is going to notice this story and start to wonder.<BR/><BR/>Nick:<BR/><BR/>Chloe is from <I>Pink Santa</I>, CBB's prior -- and first -- Christmas storytelling project. It's linked in the Related Reading at the top of the page.<BR/><BR/>Cheese:<BR/><BR/><I>So, while this is a tale of a concept of Christmas without reference to the nativity, there's still no honest way to delete the Christ from Christmas.<BR/>And why would I even try?</I><BR/><BR/>I hope I didn't imply that you were doing that; I just wanted to remark on an interesting bit of the story. Heck, the book of Esther in the Bible doesn't even mention God, and you *know* that wasn't because the writer was trying to avoid it.<BR/><BR/><I>Just because I'm not a Christian doesn't mean I think Jesus has cooties.</I><BR/><BR/>I certainly would never think that of you. You have a nicely sterile Jesus -- just a socially gifted altruist, who doesn't require anything unattainable of you -- so how could he possibly offend?<BR/><BR/>As for people saying or not saying "Christmas", well... most of us don't have a Mass either, but oddly enough, nobody ever takes issue with that part.<BR/><BR/>Honestly, I hope Lallo doesn't feel the need to clean out Antarctica (hopefully he's at least remorseful about killing French Santa)... and I'm stoked for the double helping of Zorannic awesomeness we're sure to get in the new year.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-69787895057483999392007-12-19T14:37:00.000-05:002007-12-19T14:37:00.000-05:00I've never wanted to meet St. Nick more than I do ...I've never wanted to meet St. Nick more than I do right now. I don't know if I'm infused with the Christmas spirit, but I started to well up a little right at the milk and cookies moment, and was a little verklempt from then on. Nicely done, CBB.<BR/><BR/>I hope that Lallo never completely completes his mission, or at least sees the futility in doing so with this particular member of the long.Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06946639624660520997noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-68400529339511673382007-12-19T13:48:00.000-05:002007-12-19T13:48:00.000-05:001) Why were George and Marcus mistaken for bandits...1) Why were George and Marcus mistaken for bandits when they arrived at the city?<BR/><BR/>2) Why wouldn't the incarcerated 'fake santas' follow George and Marcus through the airshaft to freedom?<BR/><BR/>3) The window thing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-49848942203179011892007-12-19T13:44:00.000-05:002007-12-19T13:44:00.000-05:00I loved this story. I'm going to read it to my kid...I loved this story. I'm going to read it to my kids next week during the Christmas break.Erichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05571302657092617699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-90730912720508574932007-12-18T23:27:00.000-05:002007-12-18T23:27:00.000-05:00"Just because I'm not a Christian doesn't mean I t..."Just because I'm not a Christian doesn't mean I think Jesus has cooties."<BR/><BR/>Interestingly enough, I know some Christians that seem to act that way. <BR/><BR/>Anyway, I've been absent for a little while, so I should comment. I do like the character of George because he is so different from many of your other protagonists (um....at least from the stories written more than 6 mo ago). Variety of characters keeps the stories interesting and shows your talent. Many authors write about the same types of people over, and over, and over, etc....it gets boring. <BR/><BR/>That being said, I enjoyed the story and will catch up on what I missed in my new job adjustment....*sigh* Merry Christmas!Sashhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06686577019173406075noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-91524432997441279602007-12-18T23:12:00.000-05:002007-12-18T23:12:00.000-05:00Well, of course Nicholas is long! It seems so obvi...Well, of course Nicholas is long! It seems so obvious in retrospect - what else would he be? Excellent!<BR/><BR/>Also, the image of ninja-like, jail-busting, vent-rappelling, blade-jumping Sister Chloe, her grey hair in a bun and rosy red cheeks looking like everybody's favourite sweet little old "Mrs. Claus" neighbour lady, is awesome. Er, at least, that's how I picture her. :)Bridgethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07259309555394112308noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-83819580197158583922007-12-18T17:48:00.000-05:002007-12-18T17:48:00.000-05:00Yippee! A long, fun final chapter.I'm trying to fi...Yippee! A long, fun final chapter.<BR/><BR/>I'm trying to find a way to word the fact that I'm thrilled Nicholas is long. There, I said it. Infer what you will.<BR/><BR/>I noticed the windows, thing, too. First sentence said there were none, and then the folks proceeded to look out them and open them.<BR/><BR/>Thanks for a cheerful holiday story.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08722639974320971726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-50040804634210191562007-12-18T16:15:00.000-05:002007-12-18T16:15:00.000-05:00Dear CodeWright,Thanks! Merry Christmas (or whate...Dear CodeWright,<BR/><BR/>Thanks! Merry Christmas (or whatever nearest equivalent you do or don't celebrate)!<BR/><BR/>Dear gt281,<BR/><BR/>Aye, onward indeed -- I have to get writing that sucker!<BR/><BR/>Dear SaintPeter,<BR/><BR/>Yes, I see what you mean about the windows line. Will tweak when time avails.<BR/><BR/>Dear Hopelessly,<BR/><BR/>Thanks -- fixed.<BR/><BR/>Dear Orick,<BR/><BR/>It would be hard to disagree. George needs more punk.<BR/><BR/>Dear Dan,<BR/><BR/>Thanks. A Mike tie-in would've beenn nice, but ultimately I couldn't find an easy place to shoehorn it in.<BR/><BR/>Dear Sheik,<BR/><BR/><I>It could almost be mistaken for a Christian talking about Jesus... except of course that he didn't refuse to die.</I><BR/><BR/>I think it might be argued that, from a certain point of view, Jesus <I>did</I> refuse die -- the memetic Jesus, that is. Christians keep the teachings of Jesus alive, so that his voice and wishes can reach people many centuries later.<BR/><BR/>Santa Claus as an analogue for Christ is not a new idea, of course, but instead a rather natural one. So, while this is a tale of a concept of Christmas without reference to the nativity, there's still no honest way to delete the Christ from Christmas. And why would I even try?<BR/><BR/>Just because I'm not a Christian doesn't mean I think Jesus has cooties. Jesus is relevant to anyone interested in helping their fellow man as a part of a programme of bettering themselves and thereby their own small corner of the world.<BR/><BR/>Merry Christmas!<BR/><BR/>Love,<BR/>Cheeseburger BrownCheeseburger Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01384136287767500794noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-14054819693808257402007-12-18T16:14:00.000-05:002007-12-18T16:14:00.000-05:00snow! oh, that one made me smile. that series of l...snow! oh, that one made me smile. that series of lovely coincidental cause-and-effect is only in the cheeseburger universe. :)<BR/><BR/>orick: chloe! of course! *smacks head*gl.https://www.blogger.com/profile/03216590789836132321noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-73994154026757720512007-12-18T16:11:00.000-05:002007-12-18T16:11:00.000-05:00One spelling error I noticed:"They're your parents...One spelling error I noticed:<BR/>"They're your parents. They love you. And even if they've been living a naughty life, they've been doing those things so that you, Daniel, would always have something to eat. If you do want to come <B>wit</B> us, we can always stop by so you can talk to them first."<BR/><BR/>And a question: Where is Chloe from? I looked around, but can't seem to place her.Nickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18086239092950505448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-30927792763087787372007-12-18T15:32:00.000-05:002007-12-18T15:32:00.000-05:00CHLOE!You really pulled me back in with this chapt...CHLOE!<BR/><BR/>You really pulled me back in with this chapter. Great stuff, long Santa, and of course the obligatory Star Wars line.<BR/><BR/>The snow, while obvious, was a nice touch.<BR/><BR/>Given that I've been buried in work for the last week -- work that I've just been told was completely unnecessary -- it's nice to come back out to some fresh-baked Cheeseburger goodness.<BR/><BR/>This part really struck me:<BR/><BR/><I>"We do it in his stead. We are his hands and his feet, his eyes and his voice. We act as his agents. We go out into the world to commit acts of kindness in his name, taking upon ourselves all of the risks -- because we honour why Nicholas refuses to die."</I><BR/><BR/>It could almost be mistaken for a Christian talking about Jesus... except of course that he didn't refuse to die.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-13073094623566444052007-12-18T15:18:00.000-05:002007-12-18T15:18:00.000-05:00Another great finish, CBB. I think it would have ...Another great finish, CBB. I think it would have been neat for Chloe to get some kind of aid or clearance from Mike. Or maybe one of those brief "I recognoze you from somewhere" glances. Other than that, a good recovery from the awkward beginning.<BR/><BR/>THE DanimalDanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01657614872089173887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-1148264253933313892007-12-18T14:46:00.000-05:002007-12-18T14:46:00.000-05:00hey didn't anyone notice it's Chloe? :) I was amus...hey didn't anyone notice it's Chloe? :) I was amused to say the least when she tested the milk and cookies to make sure they are not poisoned. <BR/><BR/>Good story, although I still like Pink Santa better. I think it's mainly because I like Mike better. He gets in to more troubles. George is such a good little two shoes.Orick of Torontohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07151258407218493474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-85460999271476035882007-12-18T13:46:00.000-05:002007-12-18T13:46:00.000-05:00Terrific as usual CBB. One minor nit to pick, it a...Terrific as usual CBB. <BR/><BR/>One minor nit to pick, it appears that you promoted George to Brother prematurely in the first paragraph (and demoted Marcus to Novice).<BR/><BR/>Have a wonderful Christmas.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-39901441776474334822007-12-18T13:40:00.000-05:002007-12-18T13:40:00.000-05:00Man, when it dawned on me that Nicholas was long, ...Man, when it dawned on me that Nicholas was long, I got a little shiver. That answered questions I had about OOSN that I didn't even know I had. It was that perfect "Indiana Jones" moment that you talked about. *shivers*<BR/><BR/>I found this passage "The were no windows in the Default Zone" a bit odd. They had just finished putting chocholate and Tangerines on all the window sills . . . It might be a bit less jarring to saying something like "There were no windows in the Default Zone to let in the morning sun" or similar.<BR/><BR/>Gotta say, this story really paid off. What a finish! I was bouncing in my seat with excitement.<BR/><BR/>BRAVO, indeed!SaintPeterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02064605142705446251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-83214084233940910982007-12-18T13:29:00.000-05:002007-12-18T13:29:00.000-05:00Nicely done CBB,, well worth the wait…You included...Nicely done CBB,, well worth the wait…<BR/>You included every traditional Christmas symbol in one way<BR/>or the other,, I think…jingling Santas,, red suits,, oranges,,<BR/>Christmas trees,, lights,, bells,, a wink,, the touch to the nose<BR/>and even snow on the moon…<BR/>Well done… ho, ho, ho, to you and yours…<BR/>Merry Festivus…….<BR/>Onward to part one of “The Secret Mathematic”….gt281https://www.blogger.com/profile/15727109065110413150noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-25952940146058797122007-12-18T12:57:00.000-05:002007-12-18T12:57:00.000-05:00BRAVO!/wipes eyeBRAVO!<BR/><BR/>/wipes eyeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com