tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post5199790923420704870..comments2023-05-14T21:11:23.699-04:00Comments on CHEESEBURGER BROWN: Story Wallah: Welcome to Mars! - Part ThreeCheeseburger Brownhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01384136287767500794noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-44139961632065022382007-09-26T01:59:00.000-04:002007-09-26T01:59:00.000-04:00I'm casting my vote for 'And Bananas For All,' bot...I'm casting my vote for 'And Bananas For All,' both for the revelation of Mike's whereabouts, and the possibility of more information about the war. <BR/><BR/>To be quite frank, I'm glad that this encampment turned out to be a ruse, because the prospect of Martians breeding fast enough to create millions of citizens in mere decades was hurting my brain.<BR/><BR/>Also: "I'm fully cocked, Doc." Truer words have never been spoken.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-22808266503413258572007-09-25T19:15:00.000-04:002007-09-25T19:15:00.000-04:00"Wan Nah-nah" As my son would put it :) Its been t..."Wan Nah-nah" As my son would put it :) Its been too long since we've seen Mike.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-32577200607844792682007-09-25T15:23:00.000-04:002007-09-25T15:23:00.000-04:00I'll vote for 'And Bananas For All'. I miss the Mi...I'll vote for 'And Bananas For All'. I miss the Mike.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-33349406712321451242007-09-25T10:25:00.000-04:002007-09-25T10:25:00.000-04:00Whoo, all of those stories sound great. Simon, I ...Whoo, all of those stories sound great. Simon, I think they became "executives" when they took over human government (during Tim's time), though their official title may not have come until later.<BR/><BR/>I can't wait to see what role Mr. Miss plays with his special brand of synesthesia (and don't think the pun of his shortened last name is lost on us).<BR/><BR/>This was a bit clipped, but considering that our hero protagonist and our author were both under considerable duress, it came out quite well.<BR/><BR/>Of course CBB wants us to think that the Shah is long, with a sly comment like that... but what if it's actually Bahram? After all, the son of the Shah would eventually become the Shah, correct? Kind of like the Dread Pirate Roberts, but different :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-70849821571272323292007-09-25T03:54:00.000-04:002007-09-25T03:54:00.000-04:00Any and all of your currently churning stories sou...Any and all of your currently churning stories sound wonderful. Of course, I have a soft spot for Mr. Miss. But don't tell him, OK?<BR/><BR/>Recently, whenever I hear Holst's "Mars, Bringer of War," I picture the scene from The Venture Brothers episode ("Hate Floats") where the two monarch henchmen, #21 and #24, are singing along to it together during the pre-title dramatic moment buildup. Heh.Bridgethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07259309555394112308noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-2518365738346739862007-09-25T02:53:00.000-04:002007-09-25T02:53:00.000-04:00Personaly I would like to hear more Long Man stori...Personaly I would like to hear more Long Man stories :-)alhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12330912850864917649noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-48080837236144555252007-09-25T02:40:00.000-04:002007-09-25T02:40:00.000-04:00Kindergarten taught me to share, so I say And Bana...Kindergarten taught me to share, so I say And Bananas For All! The last we heard of our Mike was, if I recall correctly, a rumor of his demise (perhaps exaggerated?) in The Reaper's Coleslaw.<BR/><BR/>I don't think he's really dead, and he must have something to do with this all, but I don't quite know what. Of all the loose ends making up this towel of a yarn, he's the shortest but only out of lack of information.Teddyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06429915965397673079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-64132483015717618352007-09-25T00:59:00.000-04:002007-09-25T00:59:00.000-04:00i had a hard time with abrams abrupt decision to s...i had a hard time with abrams abrupt decision to shoot the dog, too. and it makes less sense for nelly to threaten him when almost immediately afterwards he wants to keep abrams from committing "suicide."<BR/><BR/>i have a big soft spot for mike, but i'm a little nervous to focus on dr. zoran. it's like he should remain a mythical figure. but robot camp sounds fun.gl.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11890196589573443189noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-84595444170497240242007-09-24T22:24:00.000-04:002007-09-24T22:24:00.000-04:00CBB:Since Mike *did* start this blog adventure for...CBB:<BR/><BR/>Since Mike *did* start this blog adventure for us, he has a bit of a soft spot in my heart. And not knowing exactly what happened to him has been a source of some consternation these intervening months. That's my first choice.<BR/><BR/>And Robot Camp seems like it'd be a lot of fun, having both executives and, maybe, Dr. Zoran. Or do they not actually become executives until some time after the good doctor's demise?<BR/><BR/>Will be sure to enjoy whatever else is doled out.Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06946639624660520997noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-84624513519087884522007-09-24T22:09:00.000-04:002007-09-24T22:09:00.000-04:00Here's a vote for And Bananas for All!Holst's The ...Here's a vote for <EM>And Bananas for All!</EM><BR/><BR/>Holst's <EM>The Planets</EM> is one of my all-time favorites, by the way. I've had the CD for about 20 years now, and it's still going strong. I had "Mars: Bringer of War" in my head while reading. Such a foreboding song added a nice touch. And, of course, I love the whistling.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08722639974320971726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-29951032746201737802007-09-24T21:54:00.000-04:002007-09-24T21:54:00.000-04:00The Martians story would be nice, you know the one...The Martians story would be nice, you know the one where they save Abrams and we get to find out just what sort of a setup they have and who of our other friends from that time period have also emigrated, oh and how they got there.Tolomeahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16384928311920896699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-34262071310146187582007-09-24T19:21:00.000-04:002007-09-24T19:21:00.000-04:00Dear Peter,"Snog" is uncommon here, but nothing be...Dear Peter,<BR/><BR/>"Snog" is uncommon here, but nothing beats it when it's called for. It has a compact, verby punch that just can't be satisfied by terms like "making out" or "kissing."<BR/><BR/>Dear Mark,<BR/><BR/>Yes, clearly I was too brisk with Abrams' decision there. I was trying to convey that principles can crumble quickly when the business end of a lethal weapon is pointed at you, but obviously I gave the passage too short shift.<BR/><BR/>I can safely reveal that the Martians will indeed save him. In fact, I'm pretty sure we'll be seeing the good doctor again in the future.<BR/><BR/>Dear Simon,<BR/><BR/>I kind of wished I could've included Balour in here, too, but when I boiled this story down to the bones to make it fit in the format I wanted it to, it became extraneous to include anyone except Nelly, Abrams and the customs officer.<BR/><BR/>(The customs officer was originally a party of three, but that's another element that was pared down for economy's sake.)<BR/><BR/>This was definitely a bit of a shaky telling, but I'm less displeased with the final product than I feared I might've been. I'm still trying to get a hang of this whole split attention thing, giving half my writing brain to another project as we go.<BR/><BR/>I'll find my feet.<BR/><BR/>Dear Tolomea,<BR/><BR/>Well, perhaps rest assured with regard to hanging endings that you can't come across too many of them before I'm bound to cough up a resolution story. Hanging endings mean I'm setting something up, after all.<BR/><BR/>(In this universe, there really aren't filler episodes so much as dangling clues.)<BR/><BR/>And yes, it really does seem like the Shah is long, doesn't it? We shall have to investigate <I>that</I> situation more closely, I should think.<BR/><BR/>Dear all,<BR/><BR/>I'm not sure what's coming up next. <I>A Reasonable Expectation</I>, mentioned earlier, isn't quite ripe yet so I may have to go another route next week.<BR/><BR/>Stories currently churning my brain for the coming weeks:<BR/><BR/>* A story of delinquency and cruelty (<I>A Reasonable Expectation</I>)<BR/>* The fate of war-time Mike Zhang Cuthbertson (working title <I>And Bananas For All!</I>).<BR/>* A brief Mr. Mississauga diversion (working title <I>The Taste of Blue</I>).<BR/><BR/>Stories currently in pre-churning:<BR/><BR/>* How Dr. Zoran discovered the Secret Mathematic (working title <I>The Secret Mathematic</I>).<BR/>* The genesis of the Human Executives (<I>Robot Camp</I>).<BR/><BR/>And, as usual, I'm interested in hearing from you out there about what stories you'd like to read.<BR/><BR/>Love,<BR/>Cheeseburger BrownCheeseburger Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01384136287767500794noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-75102117173975900852007-09-24T18:10:00.000-04:002007-09-24T18:10:00.000-04:00Yes, the Shah who "takes...a long view", that seem...Yes, the Shah who "takes...a long view", that seems like a solid hint that Lallo missed at least one.<BR/><BR/>That aside, I liked this story, it was fun, although I do get a little frustrated with the hanging endings, I hope we get to find out further down the line what happened to Adams.Tolomeahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16384928311920896699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-68442258430886544042007-09-24T17:27:00.000-04:002007-09-24T17:27:00.000-04:00That *was* sort of odd, but fun. I'm glad that I ...That *was* sort of odd, but fun. I'm glad that I was at least able to predict Abrams' defection. I guessed that at the end of the last chapter and the feeling only grew stronger as this third instalment progressed.<BR/><BR/>Like Mark though, I really didn't buy the doctor shooting the dog. The whole relationship between Nelly and Abrams seemed to have grown an element of amused disdain from the doctor towards the Major. And that whole thing was blown apart with that little bit of what was nearly blind obedience. Not a major quibble, but it stood out way more than anything else.<BR/><BR/>What helped this chapter really work for me, too, was the reduced cast. The brief mention of the snoggers at the beginning, and then the rest of the action dedicated to the doc and Nelly. More new questions than resolutions again, but that's to be expected. Still, nice to find out about the Shah. <BR/><BR/>And Peter, "snog" isn't nearly as common here in Canada as in, say, the UK. Is that where you hail from? I like to think that in scenarios like this, CBB throws in a few incongruous colloquialisms in order to promote the idea of blending cultures in our future. Besides, it's just a fun verb!Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06946639624660520997noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-27852447366187318732007-09-24T16:02:00.000-04:002007-09-24T16:02:00.000-04:00Interesting. So the Shah is behind it? Hmm... What...Interesting. So the Shah is behind it? Hmm... Whatever it is.<BR/><BR/>Abrams seemed awfully quick to acquiesce and go in guns blazing. Still, I hope he doesn't suffocate or freeze to death.<BR/><BR/>I think the Martians will save him.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08722639974320971726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-89572244148386526142007-09-24T13:42:00.000-04:002007-09-24T13:42:00.000-04:00Huh... that was odd.So "snog" is a colloquialism i...Huh... that was odd.<BR/><BR/>So "snog" is a colloquialism in Canada too?<BR/><BR/>Cute name for the dog.Shadowphonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18057272303269328647noreply@blogger.com