tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post4339471657035008188..comments2023-05-14T21:11:23.699-04:00Comments on CHEESEBURGER BROWN: Story Wallah: Idiot's Mask - Chapter 3Cheeseburger Brownhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01384136287767500794noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-47692625579129529212009-04-14T18:21:00.000-04:002009-04-14T18:21:00.000-04:00I am intrigued about the face covering. I wonder ...I am intrigued about the face covering. I wonder what it represents or signifies.<br /><br />Another great chapter! Glad you're back!SaintPeterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02064605142705446251noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-86169439845494471622009-04-09T15:43:00.000-04:002009-04-09T15:43:00.000-04:00Like Teddy, I enjoyed the line, "I just sat with i...Like Teddy, I enjoyed the line, "I just sat with it until it was done being a dog."<BR/><BR/>The dialog is very believable and this is a good scene for, as Sheik mentioned, your great character development.<BR/><BR/>Okay, with nothing original to say, I'm out.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08722639974320971726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-76464953257017559442009-04-09T14:28:00.000-04:002009-04-09T14:28:00.000-04:00Ah, now this story is starting to grow on me.Ah, now this story is starting to grow on me.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-91228564600952638702009-04-09T14:22:00.000-04:002009-04-09T14:22:00.000-04:00"I'm going to sit with you until you're done being..."I'm going to sit with you until you're done being a girl."<BR/><BR/>Interesting take on death. She's going to die, for sure, but not before our lovable Idiot attempts to help her escape. He'll come <I>this close</I> to actually getting her out, too.<BR/><BR/>TRHTeddyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06429915965397673079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-69535061276319471592009-04-09T14:17:00.000-04:002009-04-09T14:17:00.000-04:00I don't think I can say it enough, but character d...I don't think I can say it enough, but character development is one of your most impressive skills. Immersive cinema-like screenplay provides a wonderful backdrop, but it's the people that make the story.<BR/><BR/>One small typo: "finnagled" should be "finagled".<BR/><BR/>Welcome back, and thanks for a great chapter.Sheik Yerboutinoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-6052581132876202612009-04-09T11:46:00.000-04:002009-04-09T11:46:00.000-04:00Oh Yeah, best line."You have some kind of fornic...Oh Yeah, best line.<BR/>"You have some kind of fornicated disease or something? Brain virus? Cancer cooties, broken tits, belly worms?"<BR/><BR/>The DanimalDanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01657614872089173887noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-27699119404970461372009-04-09T11:43:00.000-04:002009-04-09T11:43:00.000-04:00What a touching love story. God job CBBTHE Danima...What a touching love story. God job CBB<BR/><BR/>THE DanimalDanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01657614872089173887noreply@blogger.com