tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post2392110818050092867..comments2023-05-14T21:11:23.699-04:00Comments on CHEESEBURGER BROWN: Story Wallah: Tim, Destroyer of Worlds - Part FiveCheeseburger Brownhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01384136287767500794noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-52887479399565658812007-03-29T23:36:00.000-04:002007-03-29T23:36:00.000-04:00So it's all because of a pseudo-girl...Is this how...So it's all because of a pseudo-girl...<BR/><BR/>Is this how Sol bites the big one?<BR/><BR/>Great chapter.<BR/><BR/>Good score, too.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-57971479070521127792007-03-29T23:22:00.000-04:002007-03-29T23:22:00.000-04:00Poor Tim!What a horrid few days! Teased by a bunc...Poor Tim!<BR/><BR/>What a horrid few days! Teased by a bunch of jerks, then non-stop work, with the last line reminding him exactly of what he didn't want to think about.<BR/><BR/>Glad he got to beat up the jerks, though.<BR/><BR/>Mark, good call: Ralphie!!!!! :)Sith Snoopyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13294342645166710232noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-80530621766307712692007-03-29T22:15:00.000-04:002007-03-29T22:15:00.000-04:00CBB, you have mastered the cliff hanger. I actual...CBB, you have mastered the cliff hanger. I actually feel like I'm teetering on an edge. I salivate, anxiously awaiting Monday for more story!<BR/><BR/>And I love the fight scene. I don't particularly recall, have you written hand-to-hand combat in the first-person before?<BR/><BR/>TRHTeddyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06429915965397673079noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-56083670792436610272007-03-29T20:20:00.000-04:002007-03-29T20:20:00.000-04:00i love the pacing at the end. paragraph/cypher:.i love the pacing at the end. paragraph/cypher:.gl.https://www.blogger.com/profile/11890196589573443189noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-10922620239583913982007-03-29T14:43:00.000-04:002007-03-29T14:43:00.000-04:00Of course you must realise: I expected the white r...Of course you must realise: I expected the white robots to say, "You are safe, do not panic."<BR/><BR/>There was a part of me expecting Carmichael to be a guy. Not sure why.<BR/><BR/>I was totally rooting for Tim in that fight. 99. Is that a good score? Yes, Tim. Yes it is.<BR/><BR/>(I hope this comment makes it through. My last two on chapter 4 seem to have disappeared. I miss them, but if you love something set it free, right?)Simonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06946639624660520997noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-37735807767262916552007-03-29T14:37:00.000-04:002007-03-29T14:37:00.000-04:00I know exactly where Tim was whilst pounding on th...I know exactly where Tim was whilst pounding on the paras. I've been there once and vowed never to return.<BR/>Another fine addition to the mythology (I know its not finished yet but I empathise so much with this character that I can't help but enjoy it). Anyway back to mid 20th century economics for me.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-14937122084210474152007-03-29T14:28:00.000-04:002007-03-29T14:28:00.000-04:00I will forever associate sudden outbursts of venge...I will forever associate sudden outbursts of vengeful flying fists with Ralphie of <EM>A Christmas Story</EM> fame. So, now I'm imagining the paratrooper's face looking like that of Scott Pharkus (Farkus?).<BR/><BR/>Great chapter. Loved Tim's asking, "How did I do?" in reference to his outburst.Markhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08722639974320971726noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-16435271.post-88501884958944253302007-03-29T13:03:00.000-04:002007-03-29T13:03:00.000-04:00Hrm... the question, is there an error correction ...Hrm... the question, <I>is</I> there an error correction team at all, or is this just management's way of making sure you don't make mistakes in the first place?<BR/><BR/>So has our little acrobat <B>[REDACTED]</B> the whole thing up?<BR/><BR/>I don't feel like re-reading everything to remind myself what we do and don't know....<BR/><BR/>P.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com